It’s Only A Good Story If It’s Yours
Posted on October 26, 2023 Leave a Comment
I wrote a damn good story for a client’s LinkedIn. My client rejected it.
It showcased a remote worker’s triumphs from living with his parents to being able to build his own house at age 35. I hooked the reader with the juxtaposition of the post’s hero making $2/hr at his previous job while his boss flew around in a private jet. Then I showed how his life had changed since being hired by my client’s company, culminating with his ability to start building his very own house. I ended with an appeal to the audience to treat remote workers like people with real dreams (and real expenses) and in turn reap the benefits of a dedicated, talented, and inspiring workforce.
I tweaked the post to make it as punchy and powerful as I could, until it was ready to go live and get my client some real traction.
All that work, and my client turned it down.
He acknowledged it was a compelling post. But it wasn’t the story he wanted to tell. Now in my defense this was a brand new client that had been passed onto me by a previous ghostwriter. I didn’t have time to do much research on the client’s voice ahead of time, so I had no idea he wouldn’t get behind such a divisive angle. But in that rejection, I learned everything about my new client.
The story he wanted to tell wasn’t distracted by shock value or putting someone down – even if that person was an exploitative jerk off. Instead, my client wanted to focus the whole post on the positives about the post’s main subject, how great an employee he is, and how he deserves all the success he can get.
When I sat down to do the rewrite, I’ll admit it wasn’t as fun. It wasn’t as easy to make it compelling. Any copywriter knows that a negative angle is usually where you can stir the emotion and deliver a solid story arch.
But none of that was the point.
My client was protecting his brand personality by protecting his values. Like I teach in my VIVID personality process for brands, values (the second V in vivid) is both the most difficult and the most vital piece of the process. When a company crystalizes their values it informs every part of their brand’s personality from a solid and relatable place.
My experience with this client’s post is a perfect example of how a clear brand personality informs the story you tell, and more importantly, how you tell it. I’ll close here how I opened this short illustration. A story is only a good story… be it true or made up… if the story is YOURS.
Hi! I’m Annie Aaroe, a b2b marketing strategist. To find out more about story-driven, conversion copy and strategy that’s tailored for tech and SaaS brands, visit my website, aaroewriting.com, or shoot me an email at annie@aaroewriting.com.
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Belonging Marketing – Taylor’s Version
Posted on October 13, 2023 Leave a Comment
Why Taylor Swift Gives Me Hope For Marketing
A Discussion of Core Emotions As They Relate to Buying
It is widely accepted by most marketers and certainly any copywriter worth their salt, that our prospects have a core set of emotions, often three are named, that motivate each and every human to action. I’ve seen the three written as Pain, Fear and Pleasure, and often Shame is included in there too. One brilliant copywriter I know says that Status is the only real motivator that unites all the rest. Probably every marketer has their own slightly unique opinion on what core need or emotion motivates their audience to buy from them.
Today I am going to propose a different core need, one I’ve heard spoken of, but never fully fleshed out before. That need is belonging, which when it is met, defines for me the true meaning of community – a buzzword that is thrown around so often these days it has unfortunately lost much of its value and impact.
Before I go into the meat of this article, discussing a favorite topic in my household (because of my almost 16 year old daughter), I want to step back and explain why I think this is important. I am not setting out in this short article to argue that the core need of belonging is somehow more powerful than that of status, which is of course related to belonging, but not the same. I am not going to argue that the emotion behind belonging, loneliness, is somehow more impactful on buying decisions than fear or shame or the pursuit of pleasure. In fact, in my experience, each and every one of these emotions and needs can be an equally powerful motivator depending on who you’re speaking to, and even more nuanced, depending on the day you happen to catch them with your message! No, I am here to discuss the outcome of choosing to approach your marketing with the motivator of belonging over the others.
Today’s article is my observation of Taylor Swift’s marketing, why I think it works, and how the impact of her marketing gives me hope for marketing on the whole.
How Taylor Swift Motivates Her Audience To Buy
Let me begin by sharing my recent experience at a Taylor Swift concert. My daughter and I drove to Philadelphia on a Friday night in May, a mere two months into the artist’s epic sweep of the nation, nay the world, with her now iconic Eras Tour.
Before my daughter bought the tickets (which at the last minute I did a bait and switch on her and announced I was the one buying the tickets for her for Christmas. See, I thought I would be the one purchasing the tickets, but the chaos of Ticketmaster’s Taylor Swift pre-sale led to my daughter getting a slot on the waiting list and suddenly being IN THE SALE before anyone knew what was happening. She’d already added the two cheapest seats she could find – because at 15 years old only working part time, what other choice do you have – when I texted her my reveal – she was in class at the time – that these were a gift and she had X more money to spend. But at least we got tickets at all!)… Anyway, before all of that, I was not a fan of Taylor Swift.
When my daughter was little, all I knew of Taylor Swift was that she had an odd almost fetal look (look up #fetustaylor it’s a thing) and had released a song about being a crazy slut and taking names. As a mother of a little girl, I pretty much hated Taylor Swift . When my daughter started liking her music around age 8, I successfully talked her out of her fandom with advice like “all she sings about is boyfriends, that’s lame.” It worked for about 4 years.
After the ticket purchase, and before the concert, I became a student of Taylor Swift and my daughter played me all her favorite songs, quizzed me regularly on the artist’s full discography, including the order of release, and the accompanying colors. I learned about her storied dating life, and how she shouldn’t be blamed for falling in love easily. I learned she wrote that song about being a crazy slut as a piece of satire, making fun of her ‘slut’ reputation that she didn’t feel was earned. I even found a song or two I enjoyed along with my daughter. We picked out Era’s tour outfits. I bought and wore a corset top for the first time. We ordered cheap sequined attire off Amazon. I started sending my daughter Taylor Swift GIFs in reaction to well, pretty much everything. For Christmas my husband (her step father) bought her the newest album in Vinyl, and a record player to listen to it on. I was excited for the concert.
About 3 minutes after stepping of the Septa train into Taylor Swiftville, south of downtown, amongst the sprawling parking lots outside Lincoln Stadium that were crawling with sequins clad teenagers, Moms in bright red dresses, boyfriends with a pink heart painted on the back of their hand, and about 199 other coordinated and creative homages to TS, I was a fan. This is before I’d heard even one note of the most epic and heartfelt stadium concert I believe has ever occurred or will ever occur again in the future of pop music (Paralleled and perhaps surpassed by Freddie Mercury at LiveAid… so I’ll add…) at least American Pop Music. I became a fan before the concert because of the people.
Six weeks before the concert our family had the incredible privilege to spend two weeks in Japan. Yes it was a busy spring. Upon returning home from that life changing trip I found myself a thousand times more frustrated by the behavior of American crowds. The inconsideration of others, the brash behaviors, the taking up of ridiculous amounts of space, the lack of orderliness, and the general lack of acknowledgement on the part of most Americans that anyone other than numero uno exists to be served, has driven me to near madness. Especially at places like airports, stores, walking down a crowded street, and, one would think, heavily populated concert venues.
But not at this concert venue. People stood patiently in long lines that snaked around fences and through crowds farther than your eye could see. People said excuse me before cutting across a line to get to the crowd at the other side. The joy and excitement of these tens of thousands primarily teen, pre-teen and 20 something young ladies was bubbling over. But it wasn’t a selfish excitement, like what you picture most privileged white girls enjoy. It was a distinctly communal excitement. Older girls turned around and smiled when little ones asked them if they’d like to trade a bracelet (handmade beaded bracelet trading at Taylor Swift concerts is another THING). Mom’s stood in line and shifted weight in their high heels next to sneakered daughters who never even mentioned their discomfort in the 95º blazing sun. I don’t think I heard one girl whine over the course of the near 12 hours we spent at the venue. People spoke politely to one another. People asked for help and offered help. Young woman saw you coming and smiled while getting out of your way. Fans shared that knowing smile of what was about to happen, and during the concert about “oh my god THIS is happening,” exponentially. It was like being on another planet… or slightly like being in Japan. It was a sea of kindness. It was an overflowing of positivity. It was Planet Taylor Swift.
What’s Marketing Got To Do With It?
Finally I bring you to my thesis about belonging. How does Taylor do it? I believe, either consciously or subconsciously, that Taylor Swift and her brilliant marketing team operate according to laws of attraction rather than by compulsion. The fans are drawn to her willingly, not because she promises them fame, or fortune, or beauty. I don’t even think her homegrown white girl message of “be yourself unapologetically” is what does it for her fans. I have observed, in my own daughter, and even in myself whenever I’m in the presence of other fans, an unquestionable sense of belonging. Once you are a fan of Taylor Swift, you get a name, you get an identity, you get a family made of all who self-identify as “Swifties.”
How does she achieve this in her marketing? Primarily by playing happy games with her fans. Taylor speaks to her fans through secret messages that require working together to piece the parts of the puzzle and solve the clue. She hints at everything from the meaning of a song, to the release date of a new album, to what will be on the album and why. She drops easter egg riddles randomly and all the time, so that every time she speaks or drops a video or a tweet, fans are combing her words, and even her actions, for clues. She codes everything in color and meaning that is as deeply personal and meaningful to Taylor as it is to anyone who has loved and lost or struggled at all. And each of these laden symbols is for sale. Taylor even managed to “package” feminist energy itself in her industry upsetting, “you just watch me,” re-release of her stolen IP in the form of three, to date, wildly successful “Taylor’s Versions” of her early records. She called on her fans to support the project, taking money out of the hands of the record execs who owned her early work, and putting it into the coffers of this fabulously rich single woman’s empire. You will not meet a Swiftie (among the hundreds of thousands) who does not know , and deeply appreciate, the difference between the original recording of “Fearless” and the 2021 version.
When Taylor was crafting the Era’s tour setlist she conspicuously left out songs from her self titled first studio album, and delivered only one song from her “Speak Now” album, compared to the 5 – 8 given to each of the other era’s. Fans knew intuitively that the shortened Speak Now setlist was directly connected to the approaching announcement of the Taylor’s Version release of that album. But I have to think, this scarcity based marketing trick was for Taylor, less about holding back in order to fabricate excitement, and more of a gift by way of her signature coded messaging.
So why did she leave songs from her first album out of the show almost entirely, even though images from the album are an integral part of the Era’s Tour imagery? Only a true Swiftie could ever venture a guess. But I believe it is a gift to her fans. And when she, almost inevitably, releases Taylor’s Version of the album “Taylor Swift,” it will be another gift to her fans. And they will pay for the vinyl, the t-shirt, the Spotify download, as a gift to themselves, and subversively, as a gift to each other.
How This Relates To The Real World
Very simply put, I propose that marketing based on the driving motivator of belonging creates a more positive outcome in the buyer. This is not an easy recipe for becoming a millionaire. Unlike scarcity, or empty promises of fame or fortune, or even of status, a sale based on the promise of belonging can not be faked. In order to sell belonging, you have to have created something worth belonging to. It doesn’t matter if you are a guru, or a founder of a brand, or a president of a country, it seems, if we are to look at Taylor Swift’s example, that creating a community worth belonging to, starts with an opening up of oneself. The foundation of belonging marketing has got to be honesty, and a healthy dose of humility that understands how little actually separates the experience of leaders from their consumers. Perhaps that is the difference between a million dollar mastermind and a multi-level marketing scheme. Or between a church and a cult. I don’t know exactly how to put my finger on what works in belonging marketing, except that I know it when I see it.
In my own marketing for my bagel shop I’ve found that nothing is more powerful than word of mouth and the identity of my customers as being “bagel connoisseurs.” Is that about status? Perhaps. But what if an element of our success is based on belonging. If I can find that secret sauce and develop who we are from that starting point… I bet we would take over the bagel world.
Hi! I’m Annie Aaroe, a b2b marketing strategist. To find out more about story-driven, conversion copy and strategy that’s tailored for tech and SaaS brands, visit my website, aaroewriting.com, or shoot me an email at annie@aaroewriting.com.
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Humanize Your Tech Brand
Posted on September 21, 2023 Leave a Comment
The System For Giving Your Brand A VIVID Personality That Your Audience Wants to Know More About (and buy from!)
Today I’ll introduce you to how I help tech brands humanize their marketing and sound like humans so they can sell to humans. I use a framework called the VIVID system for finding your brand personality. This approach helps brands achieve a friendly and professional forward facing image, but in a way that is truly unique to your company and relatable to your audience.
The Problem With Most Voice Guides
Most brands have what they call a “voice guide” which suffices (so they think) to describe how their brand comes across to the outside world. The problem with most voice guides is they all sound about the same from company to company. Every tech brand wants to appear “friendly” but “professional,” only using “industry jargon when necessary” and of course they want to be “unique” and “provide value.”
What are all these $100, not so helpful, words lacking? Personality. The VIVID system helps your brand figure out who you are as a company specifically, as if your brand is a person. Even if you’re in b2b, you are still selling your solution to people – and people want to buy from other people. This process facilitates the relationship between brand and buyer utilizing our natural human affinity for other humans.
Introduction to the VIVID System
VIVID stands for Voice, Identity, Values, Individuality, and Dreams. This process uncovers what makes your brand unique. Voice is how your brand talks (or writes), Identity defines the descriptive qualities of your brand, Values are the unshakable beliefs your brand uses to make decisions, Individuality are the quirks and idiosyncrasies that make your brand less than perfect, and Dreams are the ideas and visions your company has for the future.
When companies figure out their brand personality according to these five categories, they have an incredibly useful and valuable asset for not only their marketing department, but also to use in sales outreach, onboarding new customers and employees, and even when looking to woo investors and secure funding.
How This Works: A Brief Example
You can go through the VIVID system in an afternoon and gain some quick insights, or hire an expert to help you revolutionize and upgrade your brand forever.
A SaaS brand I worked with recently had these initial answers:
Voice = Casual and informative, like an instagram post.
Identity = Cute, multicultural, trendy, young and fresh faced.
Values = Fast growing startup. Industry leader. We foster authentic relationships.
Individuality = We highlight experts who know more than we do. We’re nerdy about problem solving. We feature customers whenever possible.
Dreams = To lead a shift from transactional to relationship based agreements in our industry. We aim to follow industry trends to the very top as a go-to resource.
Conclusion
See how you relate to that company in the example, even though I didn’t tell you their name, or even what industry they are in? The VIVID system gives you a much clearer idea of who your brand is, inside and out. When your marketing and outreach flows from that understanding, your brand will have a human feel that is cohesive and relatable for your audience.
To find out more about humanizing tech, building a brand personality and the VIVID system, reach out to me at aaroewriting.com/contact/
Hi! I’m Annie Aaroe, a b2b marketing strategist. To find out more about story-driven, conversion copy and strategy that’s tailored for tech and SaaS brands, visit my website, aaroewriting.com, or shoot me an email at annie@aaroewriting.com.
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Temperance Rally This Evening: All Are Welcome
Posted on September 7, 2023 Leave a Comment
A Guide On The Essence Of Effective Direct Response Copywriting
While visiting my niece at her workplace, the Cincinnati Museum Center, an art deco spectacle housed in the city’s former giant train station, I snapped this pic (above) of some early 20th century rally posters. The simplicity of the messages on these posters struck me. They are clear, concise and designed to motivate people to attend their various meetings. I sent off a text to my niece, who’d been asking me to try and explain what I do. I texted her, “This is the type of copywriting I do, using words to get people to take action.”
Then I thought, wouldn’t it be interesting to break down the six key parts of these three posters and create a simple guide on the essence of effective direct response copywriting. If you follow the basics, understood by these hundred year old copywriters of the past, you’ll have everything you need to craft a basic direct response sales message and likely see some results.
The essential six parts are one the headline, two the lead, three the problem, four the solution, five social proof, and six the call-to-action.
Here’s the photo again for you to reference while reading my breakdown.

The Headline
The three headlines in these posters read (counter clockwise from the top):
- TEMPERANCE RALLY
- ANTI-SLAVERY MEETING!
- IMMIGRATION
It just so happens that all three of these headlines also introduce the main topic of the poster, but that is not what makes them a good headline. What makes them a headline is that they grab the attention of the ideal audience and peak their curiosity. What’s interesting to me is that the third poster, the one on Immigration, actually buries the headline in the center of the lead. In all other cases a headline comes first, as it is what grabs the reader’s attention first and entices them to keep reading. The immigration poster uses the type size to make the headline standout, even though it is not placed first.
The Lead
The lead is the part that comes after a headline. It’s what introduces the message and transitions the reader from the attention grabbing headline, into the rest of the piece. If you’re writing an email, your headline is your subject line, and your lead is the opening of the email. If you’re writing a sales page, the lead comes after your headline and subheadline and possibly a preliminary call to action. In these examples, the lead is used to introduce the reader to the subject of the poster.
The leads from our three posters are as follows (counter clockwise from the top):
- OPEN AIR MEETING THIS EVENING
- REV. JOSHUA LEAVITT speaks on the topic tonight
- NOTICE OF PUBLIC MEETING
These are certainly not the strongest or the most compelling or clever leads ever written, but they all do one thing, which is start an open loop, leaving the reader wanting to find out more. This is all a lead needs to do, which is to get the reader invested after their attention has been snagged by the headline, and it needs to entice them to keep reading on.
The Problem
This section is where you begin to make the argument for whatever you are offering by digging into the problem that your audience has. The point here is to make the reader feel that pain (that they already have) in the present moment, while reading your copy. In the copywriting world we call this “aggravating the pain.” When addressing the problem you want to make sure you understand not only the surface of the problem, but more importantly the deeper emotions that your audience feels as a result of the problem.
The problem section in these posters read (counter clockwise from the top):
- DRUNKARDS ARE A PUBLIC ENEMY! Their base habits and brutal conduct rob families of the necessary means of support. Drunkenness destroys the decency of home, neighborhood and community
- THREE MILLION of your fellow beings are in chains! CHURCH AND GOVERNMENT sustain the horrible system of oppression.
- Repel foreign influence by repelling the influx of IMMIGRANTS FROM EUROPE!
You can feel the appeal to the emotion in each of these by the use of very strong words, the negative tone, and the specificity of the claims. I find the third immigration example interesting because it doesn’t stop at the problem, but also hints at the solution. I don’t think this approach is as effective because the immigration focused poster comes off as more “preachy.” This is common for a lot of poorly written copy, which focuses on the perspective of the writer rather than staying present in the perspective (aka the problem) of the reader.
The Solution
This part of the message holds the most meaning for the person crafting the copy, and for that reason many people make the mistake of putting this first, or leaving this part alone to do all the heavy lifting. In truth, the solution section of copy only works when all the other parts are done well. The headline, lead, problem and social proof are all about getting the reader ready (desperate even) to hear the solution, making sure they are primed, curious and invested. Only after you’ve achieved those things with your copy will the reader care about the solution part of the message and resonate with the meaning.
The solution sections of the posters are (counter clockwise from the top):
- TEMPERANCE AND PROHIBITION ARE THE ONLY WAY!
- Learn your duty to yourselves, the slave and God.
- Opportunity for private audiences with the Reverend after the lecture
I love how different these solutions are from each other. The first is a bold statement of opinion, the second is an appeal to the inner life and personal transformation, and the third is very practical and doesn’t say anything about how the grand problem will actually be solved. If the immigration poster did a better job of building the first part of the message, I actually think this last approach for the solution would work very well because it leaves room for personal curiosity. The reader is left wondering, “What would I say in my private audience with the Reverend?” While the reader may not be sufficiently motivated to act by this poster, perhaps the next time they read a similar message they will be much closer to action than if they had never read this first poster at all.
In most sales copy the solution section will come in the form of the product or service you are trying to sell. Many solutions also include the features of the offer as well as their benefits. As I mentioned, most bad copy focuses on this portion of the sales message and in that effort fails to convince anyone. Rather than thinking of your product as a sum of it’s features and benefits, you will wildly improve your copy simply by reframing this section as a solution, as I have shown here.
Social Proof
Social proof comes in many forms, like statistics, testimonials, or, like in these three examples, good old name dropping. Social proof is a chance to make your reader feel like they aren’t alone in making the decision you are trying to get them to make. Social proof offers validation to your claims by referencing others who are already involved. Social proof is incredibly effective at making your argument more convincing provided that it is one thing, believable.
The social proof elements in these three posters are (counter clockwise from the top):
- Address by Mr. Herman Humphrey
- REV. JOSHUA LEAVITT speaks on the topic tonight (Note: same line as the lead)
- The honorable REVEREND LYMAN BEECHER will address the people on
All three of these examples use the name of someone important as their social proof. I’m going to guess that the reader wouldn’t even need to necessarily have heard of these specific people to be convinced they are important by their title and the way they are prominently announced at the top of each poster. These posters could have said something like, “Join dozens of your fellow countrymen” or “hundreds are gathering” as a statistical form of social proof, but I think these would have been weaker choices. A testimonial would have likely taken up too much space on a succinct poster. But even though brevity was important in the days of manual typesetting, the inclusion of these lines is evidence that social proof works.
Call-To-Action
The final necessary part of any good direct response copy is the call-to-action. The call-to-action tells the reader exactly what you want them to do, i.e. what action to take after reading and being convinced by your copy. If you don’t include this part, you won’t ever see results or benefit from the effectiveness of your copy. And yet, you’d be amazed how often this element is left off of most copy. Take a look at your emails and social media posts. Is the call-to-action there? If not, nows the time to add it!
The call-to-actions in these posters are as follows (counter clockwise from the top):
- COME OUT HEAR TRUTH
- ALL SHOULD ATTEND!
- LADIES ARE ESPECIALLY INVITED TO ATTEND
I learned from Joanna Wiebe of Copyhackers that a good call-to-action should provide the end to either one of the following two sentences, “I want to..” or “I want you to…” In our examples only the first one fits that formula, and I think it is the most effective of the three. The second uses the dreaded “should” word which may have worked better a hundred years ago, but today it may cause an allergic reaction in your reader. The immigration poster, following its precedent of being the deviant to all of these tried and true copywriting rules, is actually interesting to me. While it doesn’t follow the winning formula described above, it does build curiosity with the “ladies are especially” phrase. All are welcome, so why ladies especially? Even more impactful if I am a lady, I feel personally invited by the phrase and almost compelled to oblige. That is a very advanced persuasion tool for sure! It’s interesting to me, in light of the sentiments of these rally posters, that in the marketing world we call a positive response to a call-to-action none other than a “conversion.”
Conclusion
Now that I’ve taken you through the six essential parts of direct response copywriting messages, and you understand clearly each of their functions, you can use this knowledge to evaluate your own copy as well as having some fun critiquing copy you find out in the “wild.”
While not every piece of effective direct response copy has all of these six parts, I guarantee that effective direct response copywriting will share some if not most of these six parts. Being able to identify the parts of a sales message and why they work, or why the writer chose to do something different, will help make you a stronger copywriter and a more persuasive marketer.
Did you find something already? Post your findings in the comments with a link, or copy and paste a portion of the message with your thoughts. I promise the exercise will teach you a lot about copywriting… as we all learn best from each other. Good luck!
Hi! I’m Annie Aaroe, a b2b marketing strategist. To find out more about story-driven, conversion copy and strategy that’s tailored for tech and SaaS brands, visit my website, aaroewriting.com, or shoot me an email at annie@aaroewriting.com.
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